Holiday writing - Show not tell.
Writing Learning outcome.
To rewrite a piece of my recount [Holiday writing] with show sentences and
not tell sentences.
not tell sentences.
Draft
After we went to the river we went to Shipwreck bay it was so fun I saw a
snapper
snapper
in the waves, I went into the ocean it was so cold I felt like a frozen ice block
that
that
was in the freezer for 80 years, the waves were smashing and crashing and
raging like a wild bull.
Show writing - piece.
I went into the ocean it was so cold as ice I felt like a frozen ice block that
was in the freezer for 80 years, the waves were smashing and crashing
and raging like a wild bull.
was in the freezer for 80 years, the waves were smashing and crashing
and raging like a wild bull.
Kia ora Ruby.Your show not tell writing piece is very discriptive and there was evan a bit of ryming great job.
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